beachbum ...
By now you should know that I am a fan of your work, and this tune does not fail ...
As I have said in the past, your vocals are reminiscent of Sting - not a bad thing at all, except that it could be a drawback in trying to make it on your own as a vocalist ... as perhaps others here such as 'Manny' and 'Kingfrog' have found out ...
In this one, I also thought I heard a little Donald Fagan/Steely Dan ...
While I agree with chas on most of his points, I respectfully disagree on the key you are singing this in ... I do think it could be lowered 1 or 2 semi-tones and still achieve the same effect ... but that's JMHO ...
As for the length, as Billy Joel said in "The Entertainer":
"It was a beautiful song
But it ran too long
If you're gonna have a hit
You gotta make it fit
So they cut it down to 3:05"
Only songs played in 'dance clubs' can survive being 5 minutes or more in length ...
But overall, another very nice effort ...
Keep 'em coming ...
Another "Zoner" with the youth and talent I wish I had
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