Thanks for your rendition, Del. I'm a great believer in what I call 'aural' or 'sonic' interest, i.e., the use of breaks, fills, variation changes, phrasing, all the little and not so little things that take a performance into the next level, so to speak.

I think Bill's comment was on the right track, because I also felt that as pleasant as your version was, it could have used some fills and variation changes, and maybe a change of lead voice at times to a more out-front sound. I mean, all your basics are there, so it's all in the window dressing, a bit of sparkle, if you will. Hope you find these comments useful, and it's good that you posted some actual music. Rock on.