Fran, you've never seen a drummer use a brush on a ride?
(Makes you wonder why every brush kit includes brushed cymbals, doesn't it?) And I think quarter notes would work better...
I don't know about being keen on drummers (usually too sweaty for my tastes!), but I know a bad groove when I hear one... To me, anyway, that track with the sax sounds like the 16th hi-hats were added on as an afterthought, or ought to be so low in the mix that you just barely hear it.
And I'm still waiting to hear whether you PLAYED anything on that track...?