Earl, the volume level was about the same as the first recording - much too low. Additionally, this time, instead of 60 cycle hum, there was a fair degree of distortion, indication an impedance mismatch between the output of the keyboard and the input of the recorder.
I adjusted the volume using Audacity to -0.6 db using Audacity/effect/normalize.
Your vocal volume is still buried in the keyboard backing, and you still seem to be singing at the top of your vocal range. As Tony suggested, try lowering the chord using the transpose feature on the keyboard - drop it to -3, which would be the same as singing in the chord of "A". It should fit your vocal range better.
If I recall, you were using a stand alone recorder to record the song. I would try using audacity and record this as a multi-channel project, which would provide you with much more latitude.
If you still have my telephone number I can walk you through your problems over the phone anytime most evenings after 5 p.m..
Here's a link to the song after I Normalized the volume:
2nd Shot Hope this helps,
Gary